23-04-2011, 10:06 PM
Buna dear, am trecut pe la noua ta creatie :X
Imi place mult, mai ales pentru ca e in engleza. Pot spune ca te descurci foarte bine, deoarece nu am observat greseli gramaticale sau de tastare.
Totul rimeaza perfect, dupa parerea mea are sanse sa devina un adevarat hit. Mai lipseste melodia, deoarece versurile sunt foarte expresive. Chiar am simtit ceea ce ai vrut sa exprimi.
Totusi, cred ca trebuie sa ai grija la masura, deoarece daca pui aceste versuri pe o melodie, ar putea fi probleme.
"That we’re truly were together
And how you made me believe that tis love’s forever"
Aici este singurul loc care mi-a atras atentia in mod special, din punct de vedere a masurii.
Anyway, esti foarte talentata, imi place foarte mult ceea ce ai compus.
Astept urmatoarea poezie, sper sa ma anunti si pe mine cand o aduci (daca vrei si ai timp )
Spor la scris! :X
Imi place mult, mai ales pentru ca e in engleza. Pot spune ca te descurci foarte bine, deoarece nu am observat greseli gramaticale sau de tastare.
Totul rimeaza perfect, dupa parerea mea are sanse sa devina un adevarat hit. Mai lipseste melodia, deoarece versurile sunt foarte expresive. Chiar am simtit ceea ce ai vrut sa exprimi.
Totusi, cred ca trebuie sa ai grija la masura, deoarece daca pui aceste versuri pe o melodie, ar putea fi probleme.
"That we’re truly were together
And how you made me believe that tis love’s forever"
Aici este singurul loc care mi-a atras atentia in mod special, din punct de vedere a masurii.
Anyway, esti foarte talentata, imi place foarte mult ceea ce ai compus.
Astept urmatoarea poezie, sper sa ma anunti si pe mine cand o aduci (daca vrei si ai timp )
Spor la scris! :X
~ I'm the girl who is lost in space, the girl who is disappearing always, forever fading away and receding farther and farther into the background. Just like the Cheshire cat, someday I will suddenly leave, but the artificial warmth of my smile, that phony, clownish curve, the kind you see on miserably sad people and villains in Disney movies, will remain behind as an ironic remnant. I am the girl you see in the photograph from some party someplace or some picnic in the park, the one who is in fact soon to be gone. When you look at the picture again, I want to assure you, I will no longer be there. I will be erased from history, like a traitor in the Soviet Union. Because with every day that goes by, I feel myself becoming more and more invisible... ~
Elizabeth Wurtzel
My fic: http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php...884&page=3
]I love my family :X They are my life
My mom' : KittyKat
Surorile mele dragute : Renesmee, Elvira, Mailin, Sasame, FrogyGirl
My twin sis' : ~ Black Heart ~
Ficele mele mult iubite: Ame si ♪ Ąѕђą ♪
My Grannie : Venus- Roseta
Nepotica mea : Ioanayoana, ßéкi♡
Ma friend: Moxxy
Nora mea: Oxygen
Matusile mele minunate: Contagieuse, Tigroaica
Ma uncle : Danysor
Elizabeth Wurtzel
My fic: http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php...884&page=3
]I love my family :X They are my life
My mom' : KittyKat
Surorile mele dragute : Renesmee, Elvira, Mailin, Sasame, FrogyGirl
My twin sis' : ~ Black Heart ~
Ficele mele mult iubite: Ame si ♪ Ąѕђą ♪
My Grannie : Venus- Roseta
Nepotica mea : Ioanayoana, ßéкi♡
Ma friend: Moxxy
Nora mea: Oxygen
Matusile mele minunate: Contagieuse, Tigroaica
Ma uncle : Danysor