21-03-2011, 10:18 PM
Heey darling, am citit si pot spune ca de aceasta data te-ai descurcat mult mai bine. :))
Si mersi ca m-ai anuntat cand ai pus continuarea.
Pai, sa incepem :))
Ai inceput sa adaugi descriere, ceea ce este bine, dar cred ca inca mai merge.
Ai redus mult din dialogul acela deranjant, iar asta a facut ficul mai usor de citit si mult mai interesant.
Mi-a placut la nebunie ideea acelei scenete. Am citit cu mare interes.
Ei bine, in concluzie ai evoluat si sper sa o faci si in continuare.
Spor la scris, si astept nextul. :X
Si mersi ca m-ai anuntat cand ai pus continuarea.
Pai, sa incepem :))
Ai inceput sa adaugi descriere, ceea ce este bine, dar cred ca inca mai merge.
Ai redus mult din dialogul acela deranjant, iar asta a facut ficul mai usor de citit si mult mai interesant.
Mi-a placut la nebunie ideea acelei scenete. Am citit cu mare interes.
Ei bine, in concluzie ai evoluat si sper sa o faci si in continuare.
Spor la scris, si astept nextul. :X
~ I'm the girl who is lost in space, the girl who is disappearing always, forever fading away and receding farther and farther into the background. Just like the Cheshire cat, someday I will suddenly leave, but the artificial warmth of my smile, that phony, clownish curve, the kind you see on miserably sad people and villains in Disney movies, will remain behind as an ironic remnant. I am the girl you see in the photograph from some party someplace or some picnic in the park, the one who is in fact soon to be gone. When you look at the picture again, I want to assure you, I will no longer be there. I will be erased from history, like a traitor in the Soviet Union. Because with every day that goes by, I feel myself becoming more and more invisible... ~
Elizabeth Wurtzel
My fic: http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php...884&page=3
]I love my family :X They are my life
My mom' : KittyKat
Surorile mele dragute : Renesmee, Elvira, Mailin, Sasame, FrogyGirl
My twin sis' : ~ Black Heart ~
Ficele mele mult iubite: Ame si ♪ Ąѕђą ♪
My Grannie : Venus- Roseta
Nepotica mea : Ioanayoana, ßéкi♡
Ma friend: Moxxy
Nora mea: Oxygen
Matusile mele minunate: Contagieuse, Tigroaica
Ma uncle : Danysor
Elizabeth Wurtzel
My fic: http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php...884&page=3
]I love my family :X They are my life
My mom' : KittyKat
Surorile mele dragute : Renesmee, Elvira, Mailin, Sasame, FrogyGirl
My twin sis' : ~ Black Heart ~
Ficele mele mult iubite: Ame si ♪ Ąѕђą ♪
My Grannie : Venus- Roseta
Nepotica mea : Ioanayoana, ßéкi♡
Ma friend: Moxxy
Nora mea: Oxygen
Matusile mele minunate: Contagieuse, Tigroaica
Ma uncle : Danysor