Jail is my home

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[Naruto] Jail is my home

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#11

03-08-2011, 01:26 PM

Hello.
Trec si eu pe aici cu un comentariu nu rautacios dar constructiv, sper.
Ideea mi se pare destul de originala, nu am mai intalnit acest cuplu pana acum.
Te-ai descurcat mai bine in acest capitol, se vede ca ai mai evoluat.
Ma asteptam sa descri mai mult sentimentele fetei in unele situatii, ai avut cam mult dialog ceea ce mie nu prea imi place, data viitoare limiteaza-te doar la esential unele fraze nu isi au rostul. In rest actiunea e ok.
Astept next si sper ca nu te-am suparat.:-s
Bye.

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Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 31-07-2011, 10:15 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de hiimera - 01-08-2011, 09:06 AM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de crazy little red - 01-08-2011, 12:38 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Search - 01-08-2011, 12:43 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de hiimera - 01-08-2011, 01:06 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Miranda. - 01-08-2011, 01:51 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Twisty Emerald - 02-08-2011, 06:42 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 03-08-2011, 12:28 AM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de crazy little red - 03-08-2011, 11:07 AM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de hiimera - 03-08-2011, 11:30 AM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Mina-chan - 03-08-2011, 01:26 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 03-08-2011, 10:47 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de ^Ciresica^ - 04-08-2011, 12:34 AM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Search - 04-08-2011, 11:46 AM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 05-08-2011, 05:10 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Search - 05-08-2011, 05:37 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de ^Ciresica^ - 05-08-2011, 08:56 PM

RE: Jail is my ... home [+16/+18] - de Miranda. - 05-08-2011, 08:58 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 10-08-2011, 02:34 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Mina-chan - 10-08-2011, 03:49 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Miranda. - 10-08-2011, 08:14 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Yuki4ever - 10-08-2011, 10:45 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 12-08-2011, 12:27 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de ^Ciresica^ - 12-08-2011, 05:34 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Yuki4ever - 12-08-2011, 09:39 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Mina-chan - 12-08-2011, 09:48 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 16-08-2011, 10:37 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Yuki4ever - 17-08-2011, 12:17 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Zummy - 17-08-2011, 12:28 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 18-08-2011, 10:14 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Yuki4ever - 18-08-2011, 10:39 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Zummy - 18-08-2011, 10:44 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Mina-chan - 18-08-2011, 11:02 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Miranda. - 19-08-2011, 12:28 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Twisty Emerald - 19-08-2011, 01:32 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 02-09-2011, 11:11 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Miranda. - 02-09-2011, 11:33 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Twisty Emerald - 03-09-2011, 01:12 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Yuki4ever - 04-09-2011, 01:45 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 10-09-2011, 12:12 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de ^Ciresica^ - 10-09-2011, 12:34 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Zummy - 10-09-2011, 08:12 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Miranda. - 17-09-2011, 06:43 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Search - 29-09-2011, 06:10 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 01-10-2011, 12:24 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de ^Ciresica^ - 01-10-2011, 02:32 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Mina-chan - 01-10-2011, 10:18 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de i Ramenn. - 02-10-2011, 03:40 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [+16/+18] - de Twisty Emerald - 03-10-2011, 05:18 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 25-10-2011, 10:50 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de i Ramenn. - 26-10-2011, 09:27 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de ^Ciresica^ - 27-10-2011, 07:48 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de Miranda. - 09-11-2011, 12:56 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de SnowFlake. - 11-11-2011, 11:49 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de Ayumi Michaelis - 18-12-2011, 03:33 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de Miranda. - 18-12-2011, 04:02 AM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de SnowFlake. - 19-12-2011, 12:06 PM

RE: Jail is my... home [Konan X Pain+18] - de ^Ciresica^ - 19-12-2011, 03:23 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 20-02-2012, 11:43 AM

RE: Jail is my home - de Zummy - 14-03-2012, 10:44 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de DiZ - 10-05-2012, 11:15 AM

RE: Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 13-05-2012, 03:36 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de ^Ciresica^ - 13-05-2012, 09:22 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 22-07-2012, 01:21 AM

RE: Jail is my home - de Erina Ozaki - 29-07-2012, 01:47 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de rovy - 12-11-2012, 06:36 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de MadalinaMada - 30-11-2012, 11:38 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 01-12-2012, 10:08 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de ^Ciresica^ - 01-12-2012, 11:46 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de Erina Ozaki - 10-01-2013, 07:47 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 21-03-2013, 05:35 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 11-06-2013, 09:56 PM

RE: Jail is my home - de Ayumi Michaelis - 21-08-2013, 01:14 PM

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