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Chestionar: Care din personajele următoare este preferatul vostru?
Akita
38.60%
22 38.60%
Mark
17.54%
10 17.54%
Yn
22.81%
13 22.81%
Saren
10.53%
6 10.53%
Matei
7.02%
4 7.02%
Yu sau Roni
3.51%
2 3.51%
Total 57 vot(uri) 100%
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[Terminat] This feeling hurts so much

#47
Desigur-
Tin sa mentionez ca este un lucru deploarabil pentru mine ca nu sunt prima, insa ma multumesc si cu locul trei. Realmente,imi cer scuze pentru faptul ca nu am trecut mai devreme insa din cate ai putut sesiza nu am mai intrat pe animezup de aproximativ doua zile, momente in care tu ai postat capitolul.

Acum revenind la capitol.
Acesta m-a fascinat dupa cum bine stii, fiind un capitol de-a dreptul perfect. Limbajul utilizat a fost unul imagistic, deosebit de expresiv. Potrivit notiunilor fundamentale si propriei conceptii , dialogul este o trasatura principala, caracter ce nu poate lipsi indiferent de rolul ,secundar pe care aparent, il are.Stiu ca devine cam monoton sa repet acest lucru, insa il punctez pentru a ma convinge ca nu vei omite acest amanunt. Am avut oportunitati in care s-a intamplat astfel de aceea subliniez acest detaliu.
Oricum, trecand peste aceste aberatii, dialogul la tine a existat si cred ca a avut cea mai mare influenta/ "un impact deosebit" (am ajuns sa ma citez). Si acum cu privire la actiune. Acesta contine procedeele necesare, este retusat cu ajutorul figurilor de stil si imaginilor artistica diversificate (predomina cele vizuale din cate am putut sesiza).
Aceasta decurge conform idealurilor tale, tinzand spre perfectiune. Imi place ca ai nuantat fiecare detaliu, explicandu-l detaliat, astfel implicand lectorul drept martor. Similar capitolului anterior, acesta este un joc al tentelor , ele impletindu-se si dand aer de autenticitate creatiei tale.
Si acum sa comentez putin asupra pasajelor descriptive- au avut un rol important. Mi-a placut modul in care ai suprins atmosfera tensionata dintre cei doi, starea de confuzitate si melancolie a micutului si de ce nu, chiar si situatia in sine. Cu alte cuvinte, mi-a placut faptul ca tuturor amanuntelor le-ai atribuit rolurile potrivite.
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Personajul pe care eu il admir cel mai mult si si-a castigat respectul de sine--> este Yn, cu toate ca se comporta ciudat. Protagonistul intr-adevar ar trebui sa imi starneasca cel mai mult interes, insa mie imi place mai mult caracterul profesorului. Nu inteleg a vrut sa simbolizeze sarutul conceput de cei doi, insa voi admite asta doar in cazul in care el are intentii serioase cu micutu'! (clar . implicare afectiva )
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Deci capitolul acesta se claseaza printre preferate! Nu am niciun dubiu in privinta acestui lucru, avand in vedere ca surprinde un sarut intre caracterele mele adorabile . (rawr).
Astept urmatorul capitol ca nerabdare!4
Sper sa ma anunti in continuare
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Răspunsuri în acest subiect
[Terminat] This feeling hurts so much - de Rain - 23-05-2011, 07:07 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de .Dudiii - 23-05-2011, 07:32 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 23-05-2011, 08:15 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Ellys - 23-05-2011, 08:20 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 25-05-2011, 07:06 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 25-05-2011, 10:54 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 26-05-2011, 09:25 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de .Dudiii - 26-05-2011, 10:13 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 26-05-2011, 10:58 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 28-05-2011, 09:55 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 28-05-2011, 03:30 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de MiraA - 28-05-2011, 03:40 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 28-05-2011, 10:31 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kd.sens - 30-05-2011, 02:58 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de ^.^Vampix^.^ - 30-05-2011, 08:16 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 31-05-2011, 06:10 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kd.sens - 31-05-2011, 06:23 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de ^.^Vampix^.^ - 31-05-2011, 06:36 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 31-05-2011, 08:36 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 01-06-2011, 10:28 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 04-06-2011, 12:04 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de ^.^Vampix^.^ - 04-06-2011, 12:17 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kd.sens - 04-06-2011, 09:51 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 04-06-2011, 11:39 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 06-06-2011, 08:42 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kd.sens - 06-06-2011, 08:52 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de ^.^Vampix^.^ - 06-06-2011, 08:57 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de .Dudiii - 06-06-2011, 09:02 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 07-06-2011, 10:21 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 07-06-2011, 12:04 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Mizuki Lulu - 08-06-2011, 11:36 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de MiraA - 09-06-2011, 02:13 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 10-06-2011, 01:31 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de .Dudiii - 10-06-2011, 01:45 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kd.sens - 10-06-2011, 02:29 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 10-06-2011, 11:44 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de ^.^Vampix^.^ - 15-06-2011, 11:53 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 16-06-2011, 08:02 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 16-06-2011, 11:41 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de .Dudiii - 16-06-2011, 11:55 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 17-06-2011, 12:13 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 17-06-2011, 02:29 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kd.sens - 20-06-2011, 04:25 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 23-06-2011, 10:54 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 23-06-2011, 11:48 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kd.sens - 23-06-2011, 12:32 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 23-06-2011, 07:40 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 26-06-2011, 11:49 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 27-06-2011, 09:57 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de alexutzy97 - 29-06-2011, 11:35 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 30-06-2011, 09:11 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 30-06-2011, 09:57 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 30-06-2011, 03:18 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 30-06-2011, 03:42 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Wolves - 02-07-2011, 01:16 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 06-07-2011, 10:48 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 06-07-2011, 01:04 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 06-07-2011, 03:14 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de hiimera - 06-07-2011, 06:40 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kd.sens - 07-07-2011, 10:06 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de MiraA - 08-07-2011, 09:55 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Wolves - 09-07-2011, 09:31 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 11-07-2011, 04:08 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 11-07-2011, 05:05 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 11-07-2011, 07:33 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Inocente - 11-07-2011, 11:30 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 14-07-2011, 08:03 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 14-07-2011, 11:40 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Camelie. - 15-07-2011, 10:36 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Wolves - 20-07-2011, 06:36 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 25-07-2011, 09:31 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 25-07-2011, 10:07 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Camelie. - 25-07-2011, 10:09 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 25-07-2011, 10:19 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de hiimera - 28-07-2011, 04:20 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 08-08-2011, 02:14 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Camelie. - 08-08-2011, 02:49 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 10-08-2011, 10:01 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 11-09-2011, 04:27 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kimera - 11-09-2011, 04:56 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de MiraA - 12-09-2011, 08:13 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 13-09-2011, 07:34 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Camelie. - 13-09-2011, 09:47 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 09-10-2011, 12:17 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de MiraA - 09-10-2011, 12:31 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Addeh - 09-10-2011, 06:49 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 17-10-2011, 03:30 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 24-10-2011, 11:54 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Aiwendil - 25-10-2011, 11:49 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de hiimera - 25-10-2011, 11:33 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de MiraA - 27-10-2011, 08:51 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Piersicuta - 28-10-2011, 09:28 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 01-01-2012, 05:47 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kimera - 01-01-2012, 07:37 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de hiimera - 04-01-2012, 07:53 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de MiraA - 04-01-2012, 10:36 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 16-01-2012, 10:31 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Kimera - 17-01-2012, 04:20 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de hiimera - 19-01-2012, 12:50 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 10-03-2012, 12:47 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 10-03-2012, 03:23 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de hiimera - 10-03-2012, 03:23 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Lexxu - 10-03-2012, 09:01 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de MiraA - 10-03-2012, 11:55 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 17-03-2012, 01:22 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Lexxu - 17-03-2012, 10:19 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 07-05-2012, 10:08 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Ciquita - 16-05-2012, 04:34 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 04-06-2012, 01:44 AM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 16-06-2012, 12:42 PM
RE: This feeling hurts so much. - de Rain - 02-07-2012, 12:37 AM


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