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#54

02-07-2011, 08:30 PM

soo~oper capitol... :X dar daca ai scrie si la marimea prestabilita de site ar fi si mai bine... ^_^ oricum... probabil nu ai avut inspiratie multa pentru a face un capitol lung, asa ca te-ai gandit sa maresti scrisul... mda... cool... -_-" ma rog... lasand asta la o parte, acum trebuie sa comentez in continuare acest capitol... n_n
so... let's see... :-? ai ceva descriere pe acolo, este pusa unde trebuie, dar mie mi se pare putina... daca mai lungeai descrierea probabil puteai ajunge la stadiul la care nu mai trebuia sa maresti scrisul ca sa para capitolul mare...;)) actiune... asta este din plin... :)) si mi-a placut foarte mult... :]
dialogul e pus si el unde trebuie, dar mie mi se pare putin... -_-" eu am o problema cu dialogul: imi place sa fie mult... cat se poate de mult... :]] dar uitand de asta, ceea ce ai scris tu este foarte bine... felicitari! =D>
si ce sa mai lungim vorba daca ti-am comentat capitolul? hai sa inchei! si am s-o fac prin a-ti ura bafta si inspiratie multa in continuare! sa ma anunti cand apare urmatorul capitol... n_n dar sper sa nu fie ultimul...u_u"
ok... buh bye! :-h ^_^

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[Terminat] "Good Boys Never Die" [naruto][+18] - de hiimera - 04-04-2011, 07:52 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Fiction - 04-04-2011, 09:35 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 05-04-2011, 10:23 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 05-04-2011, 05:17 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Flash - 05-04-2011, 06:36 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 05-04-2011, 09:06 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 10-04-2011, 11:27 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 11-04-2011, 10:38 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 11-04-2011, 11:12 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 11-04-2011, 08:30 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 16-04-2011, 08:38 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Miranda. - 16-04-2011, 11:06 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 17-04-2011, 03:07 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 17-04-2011, 05:27 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Miranda. - 17-04-2011, 06:08 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 17-04-2011, 07:36 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 18-04-2011, 11:53 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 25-04-2011, 09:55 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 26-04-2011, 10:17 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Twisty Emerald - 26-04-2011, 12:42 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Paty.Paty - 26-04-2011, 01:21 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 26-04-2011, 06:38 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Twisty Emerald - 27-04-2011, 04:45 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Paty.Paty - 27-04-2011, 07:28 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 27-04-2011, 08:37 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 28-04-2011, 09:30 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 30-04-2011, 12:07 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Zuzy Is Angell - 30-04-2011, 08:56 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Twisty Emerald - 30-04-2011, 11:04 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 02-05-2011, 08:32 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 14-05-2011, 10:31 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Zuzy Is Angell - 14-05-2011, 01:40 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Twisty Emerald - 14-05-2011, 03:41 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 15-05-2011, 02:34 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Fifilina - 15-05-2011, 11:01 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 16-05-2011, 08:58 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 02-06-2011, 10:26 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 03-06-2011, 08:42 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Twisty Emerald - 03-06-2011, 03:02 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 03-06-2011, 06:56 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Kayla. - 06-06-2011, 07:37 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Daria - 10-06-2011, 10:16 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 14-06-2011, 11:34 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 14-06-2011, 12:34 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Kayla. - 14-06-2011, 08:23 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Zuzy Is Angell - 14-06-2011, 09:34 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Twisty Emerald - 15-06-2011, 08:43 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Daria - 15-06-2011, 11:42 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Paty.Paty - 24-06-2011, 06:34 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 01-07-2011, 01:46 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Kitsu - 01-07-2011, 04:24 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Daria - 02-07-2011, 03:24 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Mina-chan - 02-07-2011, 08:00 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Paty.Paty - 02-07-2011, 08:30 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 04-07-2011, 10:24 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Lena - 10-07-2011, 05:40 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Kayla. - 11-07-2011, 07:58 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 17-07-2011, 11:49 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Daria - 18-07-2011, 12:29 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 18-07-2011, 10:23 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Twisty Emerald - 18-07-2011, 05:08 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Mina-chan - 18-07-2011, 06:14 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 19-07-2011, 03:23 PM

RE: \"Good Boys Never Die\" [+12 . +18] - de Paty.Paty - 22-07-2011, 08:36 PM

RE: \"Good Boys Never Die\" [+12 . +18] - de Kayla. - 24-07-2011, 10:34 AM

RE: \\\\\\\"Good Boys Never Die\\\\\\\" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 26-07-2011, 03:20 PM

RE: \"Good Boys Never Die\" [+12 . +18] - de Daria - 26-07-2011, 05:41 PM

RE: \\\"Good Boys Never Die\\\" [+12 . +18] - de Mina-chan - 26-07-2011, 10:24 PM

RE: \"Good Boys Never Die\" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 27-07-2011, 07:28 AM

RE: \\\"Good Boys Never Die\\\" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 27-07-2011, 12:55 PM

RE: \"Good Boys Never Die\" [+12 . +18] - de crazy little red - 27-07-2011, 02:40 PM

RE: \"Good Boys Never Die\" [+12 . +18] - de Daria - 27-07-2011, 02:43 PM

RE: \\\"Good Boys Never Die\\\" [+12 . +18] - de Mina-chan - 27-07-2011, 04:04 PM

RE: \"Good Boys Never Die\" [+12 . +18] - de Kayla. - 29-07-2011, 10:12 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Miranda. - 01-08-2011, 03:59 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Anna - 22-08-2011, 01:22 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de hiimera - 31-08-2011, 01:56 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Rose ^^ - 31-08-2011, 02:42 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Daria - 31-08-2011, 04:02 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de crazy little red - 31-08-2011, 06:13 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+12 . +18] - de Sho-Yo - 01-09-2011, 09:07 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de hiimera - 02-09-2011, 07:16 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de crazy little red - 02-09-2011, 08:22 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de Daria - 03-09-2011, 08:04 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de Rose ^^ - 06-09-2011, 09:13 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de hiimera - 21-10-2011, 09:02 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de Daria - 22-10-2011, 01:02 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de Mina-chan - 21-10-2011, 09:10 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de crazy little red - 21-10-2011, 09:38 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de Rose ^^ - 23-10-2011, 02:57 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de hiimera - 05-11-2011, 03:15 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de crazy little red - 05-11-2011, 03:52 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de Daria - 06-11-2011, 07:12 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de Mina-chan - 06-11-2011, 08:37 PM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [+18] - de Lunatica - 27-11-2011, 11:23 AM

RE: "Good Boys Never Die" [naruto][+18] - de hiimera - 06-01-2012, 06:36 PM

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