10-09-2011, 01:06 PM
Etto, "Ai da" - Ai dat, nu lasa spatiu inainte de semnele de punctuatie, in cazul tau: semnul intrebarii. A doua poezie, adica ultima: Printre [...], Printre nu-stiu-ce. In toata poezia n-ai pus nicio virgula si trebuie, nu ma bag prea mult pentru ca e risipa de cuvinte. Alte lucruri habar n-am ce sa zic ca n-am citit tot, doar am aruncat un ochi (fac si rima). >.> And yeah, poezie cu rima alba (fara rima), exista, dragi cititori. :-?? Dar ce sa-i faci, pretentiosi.
"Forgive you? Why? It's not like I'm mad or anything. You were the one who got angry; just like you said, I was being too nosy. I've always been like that, not knowing my boundaries. I'm the type who'll water a plant til it drowns."
- Yokozawa Takafumi no Baai, vol. 2