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[Terminat] I just wanna love you!

Mira, ca de obicei, vine cu idei geniale, uimitoare. Nu cred ca sunt singura uimita de aceasta "prima parte". Ficul facut de tine se apropie din ce in ce mai mult de o carte, ceea ce mie, personal, imi place la nebunie.
Acum...
Mi se pare formidabil faptul ca Jesse e acum bine. Sa fiu sincera, eu, personal, sunt de parere ca nu se putea sfarsi trist ficul asta, au avut prea multe aventuri ca sa se desparta la sfarsit si ma bucur dorinta ca cei doi sa fie, precum ai spus, "relativ" bine, in loc sa se desparta sau mai stiu eu ce.
Imi place teribil de tare nota dramatica pe care o dai ficurilor tale, datorita faptului ca stii sa-i faci sa se intepe si sa se "zgarie pe ochi", ca sa folosesc o metafora, ca doar am si eu examen la romana, nu?! 21
Linie rosiatica?! Operatie? Sa fiu sincera, aceste... Trei cuvinte nu maprea incanta. Deloc! Nu-mi plac operatiile si sper ca frumosului mue nu ii va amane vreo cicatrice, nu vreau T^T Dar, cu toate astea, partea cu "te vreau" imi suna... De fapt nu-mi suna, e foarte perversa, extrem de perversa!! Esti o perversa, daa?! Sa stii de la mine65
Iti tai cratima de la ''l-a ureche'' si-ti bag acea liniuta in fundulet. De cand naibilor se despart prepozitiile prin cratima?! Aaaaaaaaaaa?! Ia zi-mi si mie45. Te mananc cu fulgi cu tot, desi te iubesc! Iti mananc cratima! Vin dupa tine! T^T Sa nu te prin ca mai folosesti astel cratima, ca te mananc. De ce? Pentru ca o cratima, in conditiile de fata, nu are ce cauta. Argment? "la'' e o prepozitie si leaga acel frummos complement deloc "la ureche" de predicatul "sopti", in niciun caz nu e un perfect compus si un pronume de forma scurta!!!
Ale dracului ''i''-uri, Mira! Le mananc! Cand e nevoie de dublu ''i'', nu-l dai. Verbul ''a sti'' se scrie cu dublu "i" la prezent.
Acum chiawr te iubesc. Intai imi dai un yaoi... O da15, apoi imi dai de intels ca apare inca unul. Prima parte s-a terminat atat de frumos, incat imi vine sa musc din tine. De ce?! A fost formidabil, de-aia.
Te felicit pentru acuratetea de care dai dovada in redactarea unui astfel de fic, unei astfel de povesti ce poate fi numita chiar "roman", desi nu are circumstantele acestuia decat intr-o oarecare masura.
Ai descris atat de bine personajele, Jesse a fost un pesonaj att de complex, incat nu ma pot abtine sa nu ranjesc de fericire ca te-am putut citi. Mi-a placut enorm, desi m-au suparat unele greselute .Suparat... Intr-un sens bun, daca se poate asa, fiindca, facand abstractie de ele, totul a fost superb. Sper sa fie si greselutele grmaticale si de pucntuatie puse la punct curand.
Felicitarile mele oricum iti sunt adresate, draga mea, si ma simt onorata sa te citesc, sa pot comenta la ficul tau si sa mai adaug si cate un sfat printre randurile de lauda, cand adaugi "i"-ul pe care deja am casunat sau cine stie ce21. Nu mi-o lua in nume de rau, o fac din prieteniehug
Cum spuneam, felicitari! Iti urez bafta in continuare. ma bucur ca e prima parte si ca va veni,deci, si o a doua. Sper ca, in curand, sa poti ajunge sa ne pui si primul capitol din a doua parte.
Sunt tare, tare curioasa cum se vor desfasura lucrurile!
Inca o data, felicitarile mele si toate laudele de care poti avea parte, deoarece le meriti din plin, te descurci minunat, stii sa ne captezi atentia, stii sa ne faci sa iti adoram modul de a scrie si nu numai.
Noroc in continuare si inspiratie! <3

P.S.: Sper sa renunti la ''i''-uri! 45
"Iadul e gol si toti diavolii sunt aici. " (W. Shakespeare)

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[Terminat] I just wanna love you! - de MiraA - 03-11-2010, 05:23 PM
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RE: I just wanna love you! - de MiraA - 04-11-2010, 12:17 AM
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RE: I just wanna love you! [yaoi +18] - de MiraA - 23-11-2010, 10:56 PM
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